Author: Jane Smith
Publisher: Self Published
Cover Artist: Unknown
Rating: 0 of 5 Stars
Publication Date: 12/29/2016
Length: Novel (~ 50K-100K)
Dr Wiseman lost her family in 1996 and she’s a little bit bitter. This mad scientist opens up a clinic where uteruses are harvested and transplanted into men. Calvin and Dennis are desperate to start a family. Will Dr Wiseman’s Tragic past get in the way of her mission? Will Calvin get to make a baby?
I try really hard to review self-published books and books by unknown authors who may not get a lot of press otherwise. Sometimes I find jewels or diamonds in the rough. This was not one of those times.
MPREG stories fascinate me even ones that aren’t shifter based. Which is why I gave this book a shot. I tried really hard to push through this book but couldn’t make it much more than halfway through.
The first problem was the lack of proper punctuation. Not just a couple times but throughout the entire book.
Steve nodded, “I thought about that.”
Calvin extended his hand to shake Steve’s “I’m Calvin Ross. It’s nice to meet you…”
Steve shook his hand and responded “I’m Steve, Dr. Wiseman’s business partner.”
Everyone writing a book should know how to use punctuation with dialogue. It’s a simple and basic concept. I’ve seen improper usage several times lately and it’s a major pet peeve.
Then we have the head hopping. All the time. There were times we were in one character’s head for a few sentences, then changed to another person, then back to the first. It got confusing several times.
There are a ton of characters in this book. More than I can even remember. This isn’t a problem in and of itself but basically every character was given a major back story that often didn’t feel necessary to the plot. It’s good for the author to know their character’s life but it isn’t always necessary to include it in the book.
Sometimes the characters seem to know stuff that they couldn’t have.
He took a seat in spite of the fact that he was in the shadows and heard voices from the other side of the wall. It sounded like Dr. Wiseman was in an argument with a gay man.
How did he know it was specifically a gay man the doctor was arguing with?
It’s little things like this that pull a reader out of the story.
The most frustrating of it all was that the part I was most interested in—the MPREG part—didn’t start to happen until almost halfway in and by then I was just done.
I would like to thank the publisher for providing me with the eARC of this title in exchange for my honest opinion.
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